Just a little tip: if you find yourself beginning sentence after sentence with a personal pronoun or with your character's name, try jumbling the words around a little bit.
He rubbed his hands together and smiled at the sight. He couldn't believe the guy had been so stupid.
Could just as easily become:
Rubbing his hands together, he smiled at the sight. He couldn't believe the guy had been so stupid.
Sometimes, this type of repetition can be useful. You'll know yourself when it's needed. But otherwise, the order of your words can really make an impact and improve your writing just that little bit more.
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